another proffesional begger
the saxophone gathers up its dreams in match boxes
I could swear that I have memories only of you
flying our nights with sales hunting the presence
of a sure morning
an antropomorphic indian dance of pure dreams
inside one midnight
if we didn't know we could dream
would we dream?
***
I do not hide my eyes
behind these green straps of urban refugee
how my steps bored with time used to
walk my memories throughout the city
these curly alleys draw there
own stenographic
sunsets
Mom why is this gentleman
throwing pebbles into the lake?
***
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Imparateasa -
I'm very fond of saxophones, I think because I love jazz so much... I can almost see the two lovers walking on the streets of new orleans in a past time... memory is strange, you know, it makes you wonder how you can still have those feelings, when they're gone for so long. Hmm, "mom" does not fit in here, even if you're a mind-traveller :)
I hope you can see the picture :)
Imparateasa -
.. when they have been gone for so long. Sper ca n-am gresit si acum :)
Ela -
If I could, I would dance on this music inside your poetry. I think it's your best poem that I read until now. And i read enough for saying that. I'm feeling in a dream in black and white, but a strange purple (rain?) spot - like in flash - is passing thorugh my memory: is no time for a "stenographic sunset", but: "an antropomorphic indian dance of pure dreams inside one midnight if we didn't know we could dream would we dream?" I think is true: we would even if we would never know. Because the unconscious is reacher than our conscious mind. Congratulations for this poetry.
Sorin DespoT -
I am not sure if my comments should be in english. however, if you understood my poem, you might aswell understand this :))) ... I'm quite happy to see that my first try (because, believe me, it was the first time that I seriously thought of writing in english) causes positive reactions! also happy to find you two here! Adina, think about it! there's a specific reason for that Mom to be there! Ela! this is not my best poem! I really... really hope so! :D 10x a lot !!! Sorin DespoT